DIY Academic Proofreading Tips

DIY Academic Proofreading Tips

We all that proofreading can make an essay read better and lead to higher marks. However, some people do not have the time or the money to get other people or companies to proofread their work.  If you finish your essay a few hours before the deadline you certainly do not have time to ask a company to  do proofreading. However, you can perform some basic (Do it yourself proofreading) that will ensure you get higher marks.

As an international student you may not be able to proofread your own essay to ensure that it is free from grammar mistakes but what you can do is to add in some more academic words which will make your essay look more professional and therefore increase your marks.

I have been proofreading for many years and have noticed that many students could increase their grades simply by substituting some academic words. Below I will present 10 of the most common mistakes I see when proofreading, and I will show you how to correct them by introducing an academic word.

At the end of this article is a small test that you do to test your DIY academic proofreading skills out.

The most basic rule of an academic essay is to make sure  you do not start a sentence with “and”, “but”, or “because”.. You can use these words, but the first word of the sentence should never be “and”, “but”, or “because” .

Our English school teachers tell us  this from a very young age, but when writing reports or dissertations it is very important to follow this rule.

You can use an alternative word instead of these words to make your essay more academic.

1)      But  =  However

It is very common to see people starting sentences with But. However, this is a big mistake and makes the essay weak. For example “But Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

Instead of using “but” you can use “However”, which is an academic word and should be seen in all essays.

If I was proofreading this, I would change this to:

“However,  Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

 

2)      And   =  Additionally or Furthermore

“And the researchers also found that ………..”  This is a very weak sentence.

Instead of starting this sentence with “And” there are some academic alternatives

“Additionally, the researchers also discovered that…………..”

Or “Furthermore, the researchers discovered that…………..”

 

3)      Because  =  “since”, “due to the fact that”, “for the reason that”, “as”

During proofreading I also find that many students start a sentence with the word because. For example “Because this study had many design flaws”

This is not an academic sentence and there are a number of different phrases that mean the same as “because” but sound a lot more formal and professional

If I was proofreading this sentence there are 4 alternatives that I would consider using:

“Since this study had many design flaws”

“Due to the fact that this study had many”

“For the reason that this study”

“As this study had many design flaws”

 

4)      A lot

Another very common mistake I come across when proofreading is that students often use the phrase “a lot”. This is a very basic and unprofessional phrase to use in an essay. For example “Apple’s profit has increased a lot ….”

If I was proofreading this sentence I would change it to “Apple’s profit has increased significantly………..”

Significantly means meaningfully. For example, if drug users have increased by just 2% then it’s not really significant. If it’s a big change like 20% then it can be considered significant.

If Apple’s profits had decreased a lot, then you would use “decreased significantly”.

 

5)      Old studies = previous studies

Another common mistake I see when proofreading is when students talk about previous research. Students often use the word “old” to talk about previous research. For example “old studies focused on the causes of depression…”

However, instead of saying old you should use the word “previous” which is much more academic. For example “previous studies focused on the causes of depression…”

 

6)      Good and Bad

1)      In almost every essay I proofread I see people using the words “Good” and “bad”.

These words should generally be avoided in an essay as they are not academic at all.

Although we often say this when we speak, in an essay its best to avoid these words whereever possible

For example a bad sentence may be like this “there is a good relationship between A and B.

Instead use “there is a positive relationship between A and B” If there is a bad relationship use negative. It is much more academic. For example, “there is a negative relationship between A  and B”.

Depending on the situation you can also use the words strong and weak.

For example “Apple has a good team”. Instead say “Apple has a strong team”

Again this is an easy way to make your essay more academic.

 

7)      So  = Therefore

Many of the essays I have proofread have tried to make a point using the word “so”. This word is not academic and it should be replaced with the word “therefore”. “Therefore, is one of the most important academic words and should be included in every essay.

A weak sentence would be

, “Jones (1986) aimed to test the effect of music on endurance. So he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

A strong sentence would use “Therefore” instead of “so”. For example: “Therefore, he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

 

8)      “Tried” or “Try”

Whilst proofreading I have noticed that students often use the word “try” or “tried”. For example: “In 2008 the company tried to launch a competing product” or  “in 2008 the company will try to launch a competing product”. Tried is a very basic word and not academic at all. Instead of tried (past sense) you can use attempted, endeavoured, aimed.

Alternatives for try (future tense) include

“Attempt”, “endeavour”, “aim”.

For example: In 2008 the company will attempt to launch a competing produce/ in 2008 the company attempted to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will endeavour to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company endeavoured to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will aim to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company aimed to launch a competing product

 

9)      “Used”

When proofreading dissertations I have noticed a lot of students write “used” when they talk about what kind of design they used for their methodology. For example “the current study used a within-participants design”.  It is very easy to replace the word “used” with a much more academic word which will impress the reader.  If I was proofreading this I would replace “used” with “utilised” or “employed” which is an academic way of saying the same thing.

For example “the current study utilised a within-participants design”.

Or “the current study employed a within-participants design”.

 

10)    Went up / went down

When I proofread essays one of the most common mistakes is that people use basic phrases such as “went up” and “went down”.  For example: “The value of the pound went up” or  “ The value of the euro went down”.

There are some easy academic changes that you can make in order to improve the quality of these sentences. If the value of something went up it means it increased, if the value of something went down it means it decreased.

If I was proofreading these sentences I would change it so it reads: “The value of the pound increased”   –  “the value of the euro decreased”.

Use increase if anything has gone up such as profit, weight, responses etc.  Use decrease if anything has gone down.

 

DIY ACADEMIC PROOFREADING TEST TIME!!!

Ok now is test time.  Please try to proofread the passage of text below to make it more academic. There are 10 mistakes in the passage.

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

If you need some hints to help you with the proofreading please see below. All mistakes have now been highlighted in red. Please replace the red words with more academic words.

 

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

The solutions are presented below.

Old Previous studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits increasedwent up in the industry significantlya lot. Additionally,And demand has increased gone up globally.  However,But experts predict that in the future sales with decrease go down. Companies have attempted/aimed/endeavouredtried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. Therefore,So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research utilised/employed used a focus group as well as a survey.

SUMMARY

The passage above still has some grammar and context problems that could be fixed with proofreading. However, you will be rewarded with higher marks due to the fact that you have used academic words. So my advice to you if you havnt got time to get a company to proofread your work is to do some (Do it yourself academic proofreading). Just read through your work and see if you can replace some basic words with some more academic words.

I wish you luck with your essays and dissertations and hope this article is of some help to you.

 We all that proofreading can make an essay read better and lead to higher marks. However, some people do not have the time or the money to get other people or companies to proofread their work.  If you finish your essay a few hours before the deadline you certainly do not have time to ask a company to  do proofreading. However, you can perform some basic (Do it yourself proofreading) that will ensure you get higher marks.

As an international student you may not be able to proofread your own essay to ensure that it is free from grammar mistakes but what you can do is to add in some more academic words which will make your essay look more professional and therefore increase your marks.

I have been proofreading for many years and have noticed that many students could increase their grades simply by substituting some academic words. Below I will present 10 of the most common mistakes I see when proofreading, and I will show you how to correct them by introducing an academic word.

At the end of this article is a small test that you do to test your DIY academic proofreading skills out.

The most basic rule of an academic essay is to make sure  you do not start a sentence with “and”, “but”, or “because”.. You can use these words, but the first word of the sentence should never be “and”, “but”, or “because” .

Our English school teachers tell us  this from a very young age, but when writing reports or dissertations it is very important to follow this rule.

You can use an alternative word instead of these words to make your essay more academic.

1)      But  =  However

It is very common to see people starting sentences with But. However, this is a big mistake and makes the essay weak. For example “But Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

Instead of using “but” you can use “However”, which is an academic word and should be seen in all essays.

If I was proofreading this, I would change this to:

“However,  Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

 

2)      And   =  Additionally or Furthermore

“And the researchers also found that ………..”  This is a very weak sentence.

Instead of starting this sentence with “And” there are some academic alternatives

“Additionally, the researchers also discovered that…………..”

Or “Furthermore, the researchers discovered that…………..”

 

3)      Because  =  “since”, “due to the fact that”, “for the reason that”, “as”

During proofreading I also find that many students start a sentence with the word because. For example “Because this study had many design flaws”

This is not an academic sentence and there are a number of different phrases that mean the same as “because” but sound a lot more formal and professional

If I was proofreading this sentence there are 4 alternatives that I would consider using:

“Since this study had many design flaws”

“Due to the fact that this study had many”

“For the reason that this study”

“As this study had many design flaws”

 

4)      A lot

Another very common mistake I come across when proofreading is that students often use the phrase “a lot”. This is a very basic and unprofessional phrase to use in an essay. For example “Apple’s profit has increased a lot ….”

If I was proofreading this sentence I would change it to “Apple’s profit has increased significantly………..”

Significantly means meaningfully. For example, if drug users have increased by just 2% then it’s not really significant. If it’s a big change like 20% then it can be considered significant.

If Apple’s profits had decreased a lot, then you would use “decreased significantly”.

 

5)      Old studies = previous studies

Another common mistake I see when proofreading is when students talk about previous research. Students often use the word “old” to talk about previous research. For example “old studies focused on the causes of depression…”

However, instead of saying old you should use the word “previous” which is much more academic. For example “previous studies focused on the causes of depression…”

 

6)      Good and Bad

1)      In almost every essay I proofread I see people using the words “Good” and “bad”.

These words should generally be avoided in an essay as they are not academic at all.

Although we often say this when we speak, in an essay its best to avoid these words whereever possible

For example a bad sentence may be like this “there is a good relationship between A and B.

Instead use “there is a positive relationship between A and B” If there is a bad relationship use negative. It is much more academic. For example, “there is a negative relationship between A  and B”.

Depending on the situation you can also use the words strong and weak.

For example “Apple has a good team”. Instead say “Apple has a strong team”

Again this is an easy way to make your essay more academic.

 

7)      So  = Therefore

Many of the essays I have proofread have tried to make a point using the word “so”. This word is not academic and it should be replaced with the word “therefore”. “Therefore, is one of the most important academic words and should be included in every essay.

A weak sentence would be

, “Jones (1986) aimed to test the effect of music on endurance. So he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

A strong sentence would use “Therefore” instead of “so”. For example: “Therefore, he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

 

8)      “Tried” or “Try”

Whilst proofreading I have noticed that students often use the word “try” or “tried”. For example: “In 2008 the company tried to launch a competing product” or  “in 2008 the company will try to launch a competing product”. Tried is a very basic word and not academic at all. Instead of tried (past sense) you can use attempted, endeavoured, aimed.

Alternatives for try (future tense) include

“Attempt”, “endeavour”, “aim”.

For example: In 2008 the company will attempt to launch a competing produce/ in 2008 the company attempted to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will endeavour to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company endeavoured to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will aim to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company aimed to launch a competing product

 

9)      “Used”

When proofreading dissertations I have noticed a lot of students write “used” when they talk about what kind of design they used for their methodology. For example “the current study used a within-participants design”.  It is very easy to replace the word “used” with a much more academic word which will impress the reader.  If I was proofreading this I would replace “used” with “utilised” or “employed” which is an academic way of saying the same thing.

For example “the current study utilised a within-participants design”.

Or “the current study employed a within-participants design”.

 

10)    Went up / went down

When I proofread essays one of the most common mistakes is that people use basic phrases such as “went up” and “went down”.  For example: “The value of the pound went up” or  “ The value of the euro went down”.

There are some easy academic changes that you can make in order to improve the quality of these sentences. If the value of something went up it means it increased, if the value of something went down it means it decreased.

If I was proofreading these sentences I would change it so it reads: “The value of the pound increased”   –  “the value of the euro decreased”.

Use increase if anything has gone up such as profit, weight, responses etc.  Use decrease if anything has gone down.

 

DIY ACADEMIC PROOFREADING TEST TIME!!!

Ok now is test time.  Please try to proofread the passage of text below to make it more academic. There are 10 mistakes in the passage.

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

If you need some hints to help you with the proofreading please see below. All mistakes have now been highlighted in red. Please replace the red words with more academic words.

 

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

The solutions are presented below.

Old Previous studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits increasedwent up in the industry significantlya lot. Additionally,And demand has increased gone up globally.  However,But experts predict that in the future sales with decrease go down. Companies have attempted/aimed/endeavouredtried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. Therefore,So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research utilised/employed used a focus group as well as a survey.

SUMMARY

The passage above still has some grammar and context problems that could be fixed with proofreading. However, you will be rewarded with higher marks due to the fact that you have used academic words. So my advice to you if you havnt got time to get a company to proofread your work is to do some (Do it yourself academic proofreading). Just read through your work and see if you can replace some basic words with some more academic words.

I wish you luck with your essays and dissertations and hope this article is of some help to you.

 We all that proofreading can make an essay read better and lead to higher marks. However, some people do not have the time or the money to get other people or companies to proofread their work.  If you finish your essay a few hours before the deadline you certainly do not have time to ask a company to  do proofreading. However, you can perform some basic (Do it yourself proofreading) that will ensure you get higher marks.

As an international student you may not be able to proofread your own essay to ensure that it is free from grammar mistakes but what you can do is to add in some more academic words which will make your essay look more professional and therefore increase your marks.

I have been proofreading for many years and have noticed that many students could increase their grades simply by substituting some academic words. Below I will present 10 of the most common mistakes I see when proofreading, and I will show you how to correct them by introducing an academic word.

At the end of this article is a small test that you do to test your DIY academic proofreading skills out.

The most basic rule of an academic essay is to make sure  you do not start a sentence with “and”, “but”, or “because”.. You can use these words, but the first word of the sentence should never be “and”, “but”, or “because” .

Our English school teachers tell us  this from a very young age, but when writing reports or dissertations it is very important to follow this rule.

You can use an alternative word instead of these words to make your essay more academic.

1)      But  =  However

It is very common to see people starting sentences with But. However, this is a big mistake and makes the essay weak. For example “But Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

Instead of using “but” you can use “However”, which is an academic word and should be seen in all essays.

If I was proofreading this, I would change this to:

“However,  Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

 

2)      And   =  Additionally or Furthermore

“And the researchers also found that ………..”  This is a very weak sentence.

Instead of starting this sentence with “And” there are some academic alternatives

“Additionally, the researchers also discovered that…………..”

Or “Furthermore, the researchers discovered that…………..”

 

3)      Because  =  “since”, “due to the fact that”, “for the reason that”, “as”

During proofreading I also find that many students start a sentence with the word because. For example “Because this study had many design flaws”

This is not an academic sentence and there are a number of different phrases that mean the same as “because” but sound a lot more formal and professional

If I was proofreading this sentence there are 4 alternatives that I would consider using:

“Since this study had many design flaws”

“Due to the fact that this study had many”

“For the reason that this study”

“As this study had many design flaws”

 

4)      A lot

Another very common mistake I come across when proofreading is that students often use the phrase “a lot”. This is a very basic and unprofessional phrase to use in an essay. For example “Apple’s profit has increased a lot ….”

If I was proofreading this sentence I would change it to “Apple’s profit has increased significantly………..”

Significantly means meaningfully. For example, if drug users have increased by just 2% then it’s not really significant. If it’s a big change like 20% then it can be considered significant.

If Apple’s profits had decreased a lot, then you would use “decreased significantly”.

 

5)      Old studies = previous studies

Another common mistake I see when proofreading is when students talk about previous research. Students often use the word “old” to talk about previous research. For example “old studies focused on the causes of depression…”

However, instead of saying old you should use the word “previous” which is much more academic. For example “previous studies focused on the causes of depression…”

 

6)      Good and Bad

1)      In almost every essay I proofread I see people using the words “Good” and “bad”.

These words should generally be avoided in an essay as they are not academic at all.

Although we often say this when we speak, in an essay its best to avoid these words whereever possible

For example a bad sentence may be like this “there is a good relationship between A and B.

Instead use “there is a positive relationship between A and B” If there is a bad relationship use negative. It is much more academic. For example, “there is a negative relationship between A  and B”.

Depending on the situation you can also use the words strong and weak.

For example “Apple has a good team”. Instead say “Apple has a strong team”

Again this is an easy way to make your essay more academic.

 

7)      So  = Therefore

Many of the essays I have proofread have tried to make a point using the word “so”. This word is not academic and it should be replaced with the word “therefore”. “Therefore, is one of the most important academic words and should be included in every essay.

A weak sentence would be

, “Jones (1986) aimed to test the effect of music on endurance. So he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

A strong sentence would use “Therefore” instead of “so”. For example: “Therefore, he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

 

8)      “Tried” or “Try”

Whilst proofreading I have noticed that students often use the word “try” or “tried”. For example: “In 2008 the company tried to launch a competing product” or  “in 2008 the company will try to launch a competing product”. Tried is a very basic word and not academic at all. Instead of tried (past sense) you can use attempted, endeavoured, aimed.

Alternatives for try (future tense) include

“Attempt”, “endeavour”, “aim”.

For example: In 2008 the company will attempt to launch a competing produce/ in 2008 the company attempted to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will endeavour to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company endeavoured to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will aim to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company aimed to launch a competing product

 

9)      “Used”

When proofreading dissertations I have noticed a lot of students write “used” when they talk about what kind of design they used for their methodology. For example “the current study used a within-participants design”.  It is very easy to replace the word “used” with a much more academic word which will impress the reader.  If I was proofreading this I would replace “used” with “utilised” or “employed” which is an academic way of saying the same thing.

For example “the current study utilised a within-participants design”.

Or “the current study employed a within-participants design”.

 

10)    Went up / went down

When I proofread essays one of the most common mistakes is that people use basic phrases such as “went up” and “went down”.  For example: “The value of the pound went up” or  “ The value of the euro went down”.

There are some easy academic changes that you can make in order to improve the quality of these sentences. If the value of something went up it means it increased, if the value of something went down it means it decreased.

If I was proofreading these sentences I would change it so it reads: “The value of the pound increased”   –  “the value of the euro decreased”.

Use increase if anything has gone up such as profit, weight, responses etc.  Use decrease if anything has gone down.

 

DIY ACADEMIC PROOFREADING TEST TIME!!!

Ok now is test time.  Please try to proofread the passage of text below to make it more academic. There are 10 mistakes in the passage.

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

If you need some hints to help you with the proofreading please see below. All mistakes have now been highlighted in red. Please replace the red words with more academic words.

 

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

The solutions are presented below.

Old Previous studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits increasedwent up in the industry significantlya lot. Additionally,And demand has increased gone up globally.  However,But experts predict that in the future sales with decrease go down. Companies have attempted/aimed/endeavouredtried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. Therefore,So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research utilised/employed used a focus group as well as a survey.

SUMMARY

The passage above still has some grammar and context problems that could be fixed with proofreading. However, you will be rewarded with higher marks due to the fact that you have used academic words. So my advice to you if you havnt got time to get a company to proofread your work is to do some (Do it yourself academic proofreading). Just read through your work and see if you can replace some basic words with some more academic words.

I wish you luck with your essays and dissertations and hope this article is of some help to you.

 We all that proofreading can make an essay read better and lead to higher marks. However, some people do not have the time or the money to get other people or companies to proofread their work.  If you finish your essay a few hours before the deadline you certainly do not have time to ask a company to  do proofreading. However, you can perform some basic (Do it yourself proofreading) that will ensure you get higher marks.

As an international student you may not be able to proofread your own essay to ensure that it is free from grammar mistakes but what you can do is to add in some more academic words which will make your essay look more professional and therefore increase your marks.

I have been proofreading for many years and have noticed that many students could increase their grades simply by substituting some academic words. Below I will present 10 of the most common mistakes I see when proofreading, and I will show you how to correct them by introducing an academic word.

At the end of this article is a small test that you do to test your DIY academic proofreading skills out.

The most basic rule of an academic essay is to make sure  you do not start a sentence with “and”, “but”, or “because”.. You can use these words, but the first word of the sentence should never be “and”, “but”, or “because” .

Our English school teachers tell us  this from a very young age, but when writing reports or dissertations it is very important to follow this rule.

You can use an alternative word instead of these words to make your essay more academic.

1)      But  =  However

It is very common to see people starting sentences with But. However, this is a big mistake and makes the essay weak. For example “But Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

Instead of using “but” you can use “However”, which is an academic word and should be seen in all essays.

If I was proofreading this, I would change this to:

“However,  Jones (1986) argued that listening to music whilst exercising leads to lower perceived exertion”.

 

2)      And   =  Additionally or Furthermore

“And the researchers also found that ………..”  This is a very weak sentence.

Instead of starting this sentence with “And” there are some academic alternatives

“Additionally, the researchers also discovered that…………..”

Or “Furthermore, the researchers discovered that…………..”

 

3)      Because  =  “since”, “due to the fact that”, “for the reason that”, “as”

During proofreading I also find that many students start a sentence with the word because. For example “Because this study had many design flaws”

This is not an academic sentence and there are a number of different phrases that mean the same as “because” but sound a lot more formal and professional

If I was proofreading this sentence there are 4 alternatives that I would consider using:

“Since this study had many design flaws”

“Due to the fact that this study had many”

“For the reason that this study”

“As this study had many design flaws”

 

4)      A lot

Another very common mistake I come across when proofreading is that students often use the phrase “a lot”. This is a very basic and unprofessional phrase to use in an essay. For example “Apple’s profit has increased a lot ….”

If I was proofreading this sentence I would change it to “Apple’s profit has increased significantly………..”

Significantly means meaningfully. For example, if drug users have increased by just 2% then it’s not really significant. If it’s a big change like 20% then it can be considered significant.

If Apple’s profits had decreased a lot, then you would use “decreased significantly”.

 

5)      Old studies = previous studies

Another common mistake I see when proofreading is when students talk about previous research. Students often use the word “old” to talk about previous research. For example “old studies focused on the causes of depression…”

However, instead of saying old you should use the word “previous” which is much more academic. For example “previous studies focused on the causes of depression…”

 

6)      Good and Bad

1)      In almost every essay I proofread I see people using the words “Good” and “bad”.

These words should generally be avoided in an essay as they are not academic at all.

Although we often say this when we speak, in an essay its best to avoid these words whereever possible

For example a bad sentence may be like this “there is a good relationship between A and B.

Instead use “there is a positive relationship between A and B” If there is a bad relationship use negative. It is much more academic. For example, “there is a negative relationship between A  and B”.

Depending on the situation you can also use the words strong and weak.

For example “Apple has a good team”. Instead say “Apple has a strong team”

Again this is an easy way to make your essay more academic.

 

7)      So  = Therefore

Many of the essays I have proofread have tried to make a point using the word “so”. This word is not academic and it should be replaced with the word “therefore”. “Therefore, is one of the most important academic words and should be included in every essay.

A weak sentence would be

, “Jones (1986) aimed to test the effect of music on endurance. So he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

A strong sentence would use “Therefore” instead of “so”. For example: “Therefore, he asked participants to run 15 miles whilst listening to music.”

 

8)      “Tried” or “Try”

Whilst proofreading I have noticed that students often use the word “try” or “tried”. For example: “In 2008 the company tried to launch a competing product” or  “in 2008 the company will try to launch a competing product”. Tried is a very basic word and not academic at all. Instead of tried (past sense) you can use attempted, endeavoured, aimed.

Alternatives for try (future tense) include

“Attempt”, “endeavour”, “aim”.

For example: In 2008 the company will attempt to launch a competing produce/ in 2008 the company attempted to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will endeavour to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company endeavoured to launch a competing product

In 2008 the company will aim to launch a competing product/ in 2008 the company aimed to launch a competing product

 

9)      “Used”

When proofreading dissertations I have noticed a lot of students write “used” when they talk about what kind of design they used for their methodology. For example “the current study used a within-participants design”.  It is very easy to replace the word “used” with a much more academic word which will impress the reader.  If I was proofreading this I would replace “used” with “utilised” or “employed” which is an academic way of saying the same thing.

For example “the current study utilised a within-participants design”.

Or “the current study employed a within-participants design”.

 

10)    Went up / went down

When I proofread essays one of the most common mistakes is that people use basic phrases such as “went up” and “went down”.  For example: “The value of the pound went up” or  “ The value of the euro went down”.

There are some easy academic changes that you can make in order to improve the quality of these sentences. If the value of something went up it means it increased, if the value of something went down it means it decreased.

If I was proofreading these sentences I would change it so it reads: “The value of the pound increased”   –  “the value of the euro decreased”.

Use increase if anything has gone up such as profit, weight, responses etc.  Use decrease if anything has gone down.

 

DIY ACADEMIC PROOFREADING TEST TIME!!!

Ok now is test time.  Please try to proofread the passage of text below to make it more academic. There are 10 mistakes in the passage.

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

If you need some hints to help you with the proofreading please see below. All mistakes have now been highlighted in red. Please replace the red words with more academic words.

 

Old studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits went up in the industry a lot. And demand has gone up globally.  But experts predict that in the future sales with go down. Companies have tried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research used a focus group as well as a survey.

The solutions are presented below.

Old Previous studies have focused on the product designs of smart phones. Profits increasedwent up in the industry significantlya lot. Additionally,And demand has increased gone up globally.  However,But experts predict that in the future sales with decrease go down. Companies have attempted/aimed/endeavouredtried to create the perfect product and hope that one day their product can replace the need for a laptop. Therefore,So they have done a lot of market research. Their market research utilised/employed used a focus group as well as a survey.

SUMMARY

The passage above still has some grammar and context problems that could be fixed with proofreading. However, you will be rewarded with higher marks due to the fact that you have used academic words. So my advice to you if you havnt got time to get a company to proofread your work is to do some (Do it yourself academic proofreading). Just read through your work and see if you can replace some basic words with some more academic words.

I wish you luck with your essays and dissertations and hope this article is of some help to you.

 

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